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Post by Her Highness on Jan 4, 2016 6:12:24 GMT
ajanaku Her Highness , You have both written beautiful poems but I need to see some more to pick a winner  lol we're just begining. Wouldn't hurt to add your own  |
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Post by OmoOba on Jan 4, 2016 6:14:19 GMT
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Post by Her Highness on Jan 4, 2016 6:24:29 GMT
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Post by Shymmex on Jan 4, 2016 11:05:03 GMT
Shymmex , Can we please delete the extra posts? Extra posts?  Why are you so shy? |
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Post by ajanaku on Jan 4, 2016 20:16:34 GMT
Ibi ti a f’ejo lo, ibe la boro de Gba oro ife to wa lokan mi Bi oju owuro se n ji aye, ni ife re n ji okan mi Ololufe, gba awon oro yi bi tooto Iba n mu mi nigba ti a ko ba soro Ri mi bi o se n ri okuta iyebiyeUsu (Isu) ko le dagba lai si itoju l'odo agbe, beeni ife wa ko le se rere laisi eMa gbagbe ileri ti a jo so nipa igbeyawo O so pe odo mi ni okan re wa Lokan mi ni odo ife re se n san E bami gba oro yi bi oro orisha TRANSLATIONOur conversation began where we left off
Accept the words in my heart
Just as the dawn awakens the earth, you awaken my heart
My love, please accept these words as truth
I'm overtaken by fever when we don't speak
See me as you would a precious jewel (diamond)
Yams do not grow without the care of its farmer, nor would our love thrive without you
Don't forget our promise of marriage
Tell me that your heart is with me, because
Within my heart is where your river of love flows
Take these words as the words of the gods (orisha)NB: Translation weakens its beauty. Some poems should stay in Yoruba. Poem not targeted at anybody. Usu is ekiti word for Yam. What a piece! Ileke, 3 Gbosaa for you! That was absolutely magnificent! Excellent use of Imagery and ingenious play with words! Sorry, Ileke, are you a poet? Do you write poetry besides this contest of ours? This masterpiece just increased my admiration, likeness and respect for you. The lines in bold would melt the stoniest of hearts, you know! Now, I wish you were referring to me in the poem. |
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Post by Her Highness on Jan 4, 2016 20:16:39 GMT
Shymmex , Can we please delete the extra posts? Extra posts? Why are you so shy? I'm an introvert, that's why. You're an extrovert, I can tell. lol I've been meaning to tell you that you take a lot of energy outta me, even only |
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Post by Her Highness on Jan 4, 2016 20:19:52 GMT
What a piece! Ileke, 3 Gbosaa for you! That was absolutely magnificent! Excellent use of Imagery and ingenious play with words! Sorry, Ileke, are you a poet? Do you write poetry besides this contest of ours? This masterpiece just increased my admiration, likeness and respect for you. The lines in bold would melt the stoniest of hearts, you know! Now, I wish you were referring to me in the poem. Lol are you being nice? Be honest. No, I'm not a poet. I thank you for starting this contest because it's helping my Yoruba skills. I had to sit down and think of words to use beyond the everyday words. I'm happy you liked it.  Your next poem: Ile aiye Ile asan (14 lines) |
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Post by ajanaku on Jan 4, 2016 20:23:49 GMT
ajanaku , My nyggah, tupackshakur, a literary head. You need to help me with my poetry skills - I'm struggling. Shymmexx baba! Why you dey whine me na? I'm sure you know you could scour the net for resources on being a good poet! There are a lot of articles and sites on poetry writing, you know! Also, ensure you familiarize yourself with the numerous poetry tools and devices out there, the commonest being Rhyme and Rhythm. You could also study the poems of great Poets like Maya Angelou, Elizabeth Barrett browning and our own Tupac Shakur...There a lot of cool poets out there. |
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Post by ajanaku on Jan 4, 2016 20:27:57 GMT
He needs to help you? By the time I'm done with his case, you'll be begging me to unteach what he has taught you  My don is a supreme literary head. And you lot would make a perfect couple.He needs to help me out, I'm struggling in that aspect, especially when it comes to structure and translating my imagination into something poetic. You can say that again, Bro... No mind that Ileke. Her shakara too much! |
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Post by ajanaku on Jan 4, 2016 20:30:57 GMT
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Post by Her Highness on Jan 4, 2016 20:35:22 GMT
My don is a supreme literary head. And you lot would make a perfect couple.He needs to help me out, I'm struggling in that aspect, especially when it comes to structure and translating my imagination into something poetic. You can say that again, Bro... No mind that Ileke. Her shakara too much! I feel sorry for you o cuz I don talk my own. Oya, start with the next poem: Ile aye ile asan. Do you want to restrict the content of our poem to the poem title (i.e ile aiye ile asan) or do you want it to be free flowing (about anything as long as all the letters are accounted for)? |
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Post by ajanaku on Jan 4, 2016 20:39:15 GMT
What a piece! Ileke, 3 Gbosaa for you! That was absolutely magnificent! Excellent use of Imagery and ingenious play with words! Sorry, Ileke, are you a poet? Do you write poetry besides this contest of ours? This masterpiece just increased my admiration, likeness and respect for you. The lines in bold would melt the stoniest of hearts, you know! Now, I wish you were referring to me in the poem. Lol are you being nice? Be honest. No, I'm not a poet. I thank you for starting this contest because it's helping my Yoruba skills. I had to sit down and think of words to use beyond the everyday words. I'm happy you liked it. Your next poem: Ile aiye Ile asan (14 lines) Being nice? Why should I be? You know I'm always quick to point out your blunders. This time around, trust me, that poem was cool. Some lines there gave me goose bumps. Ileke, you too much! To even think you've not dabbled into the world of poetry. Ileke, why not give poetry writing a trial. You could publish your collection someday, you know and possibly end up winning a Nobel prize in literature. Impossible is nothing, you know. I also intend publishing someday too. I still dey write the poems keep somewhere sha. We could also publish together as a couple too, you know. If only, you'd consider my application when the "break" and "healing period" is over. |
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Post by Her Highness on Jan 4, 2016 20:43:23 GMT
Lol are you being nice? Be honest. No, I'm not a poet. I thank you for starting this contest because it's helping my Yoruba skills. I had to sit down and think of words to use beyond the everyday words. I'm happy you liked it. Your next poem: Ile aiye Ile asan (14 lines) Being nice? Why should I be? You know I'm always quick to point out your blunders. This time around, trust me, that poem was cool. Some lines there gave me goose bumps. Ileke, you too much! To even think you've not dabbled into the world of poetry. Ileke, why not give poetry writing a trial. You could publish your collection someday, you know and possibly end up winning a Nobel prize in literature. Impossible is nothing, you know. I also intend publishing someday too. I still dey write the poems keep somewhere sha. We could also publish to together as couple too, you know. If only, you'd consider my application when the "break" and "healing period" is over. Lol now you're too much. Your compliments won't make me take it easy on you, sir. You write poems? I'd love to read some of them, if you're interested. My healing period will be over in 6yrs, are you ready to wait then?  |
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Post by ajanaku on Jan 4, 2016 20:45:09 GMT
You can say that again, Bro... No mind that Ileke. Her shakara too much! I feel sorry for you o cuz I don talk my own. Oya, start with the next poem: Ile aye ile asan. Do you want to restrict the content of our poem to the poem title (i.e ile aiye ile asan) or do you want it to be free flowing (about anything as long as all the letters are accounted for)? I noticed you didn't restrict the contents of your poem to the title, but the purity of the contents overshadows that. I think the contents should be based on the title. That's what I'll be doing for my next assignment. And I think you should do that too for your next assignment. Right? |
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Post by Her Highness on Jan 4, 2016 20:49:23 GMT
I feel sorry for you o cuz I don talk my own. Oya, start with the next poem: Ile aye ile asan. Do you want to restrict the content of our poem to the poem title (i.e ile aiye ile asan) or do you want it to be free flowing (about anything as long as all the letters are accounted for)? I noticed you didn't restrict the contents of your poem to the title, but the purity of the contents overshadows that. I think the contents should be based on the title. That's what I'll be doing for my next assignment. And I think you should do that too for your next assignment. Right? Sounds good! |
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